How to write copy like Optimus Prime

Alex In My Inbox #83 ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏  ͏ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ ­ Looking for a great Shopify theme for your store ahead of the holidays? Check out why Blum is a top choice, especially when it comes to providing a great mobile experience. [Learn more here.]( Hey there, happy Friday! Welcome to Edition 83 of Alex In My Inbox. Alex In My Inbox is a weekly copywriting series where I share interesting, actionable, and hilarious copywriting tips from "Alex." Alex is an anonymous copywriter who shares these tips with me so I can share them with you.  But first, ❌ you don’t want this to happen ❌ You work incredibly hard to drive traffic to your site, only for visitors to leave after a few seconds... When selecting a theme for your Shopify store, it's important to pay attention to the page experience it can provide for you. [Blum]( is a top choice when it comes to optimizing for a great mobile experience. Here are a few reasons why: - Blum is fine-tuned for the fastest page speed possible: Its demo stores score up to 88 for mobile on Google PageSpeed insight. - Designed for smartphones first: despite the limited space on mobile, Blum's design can help you engage your customers and tell stories that convert. - Effective promotions: hotspot, carousel, sticky cart…just to name a few. On top of that, the Blum theme is being offered at a lower price this Fall. Check out the [theme here]( and get your store ready before the biggest holiday season! Don't have a Shopify store yet? Join Shopify via [this link]( for a free custom domain and only pay $1/month for your first 3 months. For further page customization, [PageFly page builder]( is a great option. sponsored  Today, Alex has an email for us about how to tell better transformation stories and double your sales with this method.  This is such a powerful storytelling tool if used correctly.  Let’s check it out:     Dear Chase, I remember when I first started growing on Twitter. I didn’t really know what I was doing on the platform. I was used to writing long copy that was for brands. I became friends with this Twitter ghostwriter who was popping off back then, and he gave me some pointers on how to tweet for engagement while still building a good brand. He gave me a tweet formula that went like this: At age 18, I was doing X. Now, at age 22, I’m doing Y. Lesson... The first line creates relatability, because you’re exposing a low point. The second line creates hope, because you’ve improved so much in a short period of time. The last line is a takeaway that the reader can use to do the same thing. The first time I tweeted like that, it got like 100 likes. At the time, that was what I considered “blowing up”. Since then, I realized the power that a transformation story holds. And now I use it all the time. If you’re trying to convince an email list full of people that there’s something they can achieve, you need to use this framework. 2 years ago, John was struggling to get X result. He tried XYZ things, but none of them worked. Then he tried my method, and he was skeptical at first, but it worked. Now, John has X result + a little more. The key here is to use your prospects’ objections in the story and make it clear that the transformation happened in spite of all of those things. For example: If your prospects usually think your method is BS, you need to say that John thought that too, until he tried it. If your prospects think it won’t work because they’re too busy, you need to talk about how John works 12 hours a day and still made it happen. If your prospects think they need to have certain personality traits to succeed, tell them how John has an IQ of 85. The thing is, these need to be somewhat true. You can’t LIE and tell people that John did all these things if he didn’t. But, you need to remember that John had to overcome a bunch of things to get results with your product. If John didn’t, then someone else did. Any good client will have pages and pages of social proof for you to comb through so you can tell a good transformation story. Just do your best to make it sound like a story your email list will resonate with. It builds trust. It strengthens credibility. It inspires people. And it makes them wanna buy. Keep this in mind when you write something this week. Yours truly, Alex. Sent from JOHN’S iPhone P.S. If you want to hire a freelance copywriter who has been trained and vetted by me (Alex, aka Cardinal Mason), [fill out this quick form.]( By the way, I won't charge you anything for relevant intros. And there's no catch. I have been providing this value-add service for the copywriters I'm working with, and wanted to hook up Chase's audience with this opportunity too. P.P.S. Don't need to hire a freelance copywriter, but do need a freelance marketer? I used to be a freelance marketer for hire on [MarketerHire]( back in the day, and have since partnered with them to hire some great freelance marketers from the platform. Ahead of Q4, I highly recommend chatting with them about your marketing needs. They'll quickly and seamlessly be able to get you connected with a best-in-class, pre-vetted freelance marketer. [Get in-touch with them here.](     I hope you enjoyed this week's Alex In My Inbox edition. Have a great weekend, Chase P.S. Here are two ways we can work together: 1. If you own/run an ecommerce brand and are looking for a best-in-class email marketing agency, [please fill out this form.]( 2. If you want to grow your LinkedIn following, [here's some info on my LinkedIn Growth Service.](     © 2023 Chase Dimond No longer want to receive these emails? [Unsubscribe](. Chase Dimond 2960 Champion Way #1701 Tustin, CA 92782